Local Sugar (Manuscript)

Local Sugar (Manuscript)
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Synopsis

Mary Lou, a mouse, has just been elected mayor of the little farming town of Sugarville and is set to be married to her long-time sweetheart, Sly Snake (the town mechanic). The night before their wedding, a suspicious fire burns the sugar mill to the ground, putting most of the town out of work.

The slimy local land baron, a frog named Rowley, says he’ll finish off the town — unless Mary Lou agrees to marry him. Sly Snake leaps in to defend Mary Lou’s honor but is beaten badly — and worse, accused of setting the fire.

Sly has to get the goods on Rowley, clear his own name, and stop the wedding — before Rowley goes back on his (good for nothing) word and wipes Sugarville off the map.

Dove Review

To the author: “Local Sugar” is a delightful manuscript! I would love to see this made into an animated special or possibly a CGI special-effects film. The characters are delightful and distinctly good and evil, such as Mary Lou, the mouse, and the dastardly Rowley, the frog, who wants to take her from her love, the snake, Sly.

The script contains dramatic conflict surrounding the burning of the mill in Sugarville and the impending forced marriage of Mary Lou to Rowley, despite her love for Sly. It’s action-packed at times, and its suspenseful elements work well, along with the fantasy worlds of the creatures and the funny moments. For example, when Sheriff Hoggert arrests Sly, the snake, on page 28 and reads him his rights, he says, “Sly Snake, you have the right to remain scaly. Anything you hiss will be held against you in a pit of law.” Also, on page 8, Sly is in a toilet and says, “I’ve snaked out a few toilets in my day, but this is ridiculous.” On page 33, the song of “Hello, Mary Lou — Good-bye, Heart” by Ricky Nelson is funny when sung to Mary Lou.

It was nice to hear the mention of the Trinity in the wedding ceremony, as these characters are very human-like, even if they are beavers, frogs, bears, mice, and snakes. Well done! We are pleased to award this manuscript our Dove Seal for all ages and hope to see it become a film. We believe kids and parents will love the life-like, comedic characters.

Content Description

Sex: A few of the characters kiss, including a one who kisses his bride deeply.
Language: The narrator says on page 5 that a character uttered curses when learning of an engagement in the newspaper, but none are uttered audibly; Oh Lord-2; That Old Devil-1; Crap-1; "You crazy old biddy"-1;"Jerk"-1; "Monster"-1; Hades-1; "Sentimental crackpot"-1; "Bloodsucking Waitress"-1; Threat to possibly wring a "snooping neck"-1; "Shaddup" (instead of shut up)-1; "Useless Ape"-1; "Idiot"-1
Violence: A newspaper is flung and hits a character in the back; fire destroys a local mill; the fire chief shakes a panicking mouse but only to calm her; frog grabs snake's throat; a snake's fang tooth is knocked out; a character is partly swallowed but eventually released; character bitten on nose; a character is dunked in the water.
Drugs: None
Nudity: None
Other: The mention of sabotage; in a humorous scene, Mary Lou's uncle's "ghost," from a poster, tells her to marry the snake she loves, or he will come back and haunt her; the sheriff is injured in an accident; a forced marriage is stopped.

Info

Company: Andrew Garrett
Genre: Animated
Runtime: 106 min.
Industry Rating: Not Rated
Reviewer: Edwin L. Carpenter